A few weeks ago Y4C were writing Haunted house stories to coincide with their 'no place like home' topic. The class produced some fantastic descriptions. Below is a sample from Joel's brilliant story. Slowly, pushing the rusty old iron gate open, I gradually got closer and closer. It started to rain, it was so hard it was like a bullet from a gun. Something came into my vision it was two meddling statues ready to pounce. Venturing on the weather got worse and worse when I got closer. I had no choice but to enter. What's going to happen? The house was abandoned.
I jumped through the window and I went in a room. The fire flame flickered as a blaze. The wet window spluttered the room with water. The candles were lit everywhere, I looked very closely and there was a toy car and a treasure chest.
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Thats sounds scary i wanna know wat happens next!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i started with joles bit then carried on with my own bit:
Slowly, pushing the rusty old iron gate open, I gradually got closer and closer. It started to rain, it was so hard it was like a bullet from a gun. Something came into my vision it was two scary statues ready to pounce. Venturing on , the weather got worse and worse when I got closer , I had no choice but to enter. The house was abandoned. What's going to happen?
I jumped through the window and I went into a room. The fire flame flickered as a blaze. The wet window spluttered the room with water. The candles were lit everywhere, I looked very closely and there was a toy car and a treasure chest.
I began to scout for a key, I searched in every nook and crannie.
“AHA!”
I found the lifeless key on the floor next to the kitchen door. I opened the chest, the hinges grinded like two motors colliding . When I opened the chest, there was a nasty odour.
I picked up a hand full of the glamouring gold,also it felt like weight lifting, going up stairs I saw another statue glaring at me I was petrified then ….
I picked up the blue toy car and it started driving around I was petrified this was ridiculous, I scampered down the stairs whilst this stupid car was chasing after me!
I picked it up and threw it out of the window there was a big BOOM! “finally”
I ran home , told my parents then they rang the police and closed the abandoned house down and questioned me for hours.
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